Meet "Jane" - She's Hot

[TalismanRing]

Ross Putman

@femscriptintros

Producer. These are intros for female leads in actual scripts I read. Names changed to JANE, otherwise verbatim. Update as I go. Apologies if I quote your work.

A gorgeous woman, JANE, 23, is a little tipsy, dancing naked on her big bed, as adorable as she is sexy. *BONUS PTS FOR BEING THE 1ST LINE

— Ross Putman (@femscriptintros)

February 10, 2016

Like draping the Venus De Milo in a burlap dress, Jane’s sensational natural beauty fights through her plain blue Ann Taylor outfit.

— Ross Putman (@femscriptintros)

February 10, 2016

This is JANE. She’s lithe, leggy, spirited, outgoing, not afraid to speak her mind, with a sense of humor as dry as the Sonoran Desert.

— Ross Putman (@femscriptintros)

February 10, 2016

A YOUNG MEXICAN WOMAN sitting on a BUS STOP BENCH. Her name is JANE. She yawns, stretching her pretty face as she struggles to wake up.

— Ross Putman (@femscriptintros)

February 10, 2016

JANE is in her mid-30s and attractive, even now with dark semi-circles underlining her closed eyes.

— Ross Putman (@femscriptintros)

February 10, 2016

Though drop-dead beautiful, JANE (40) has the appearance of someone whose confidence has been shaken. She is a raw, sexual force, impeded.

— Ross Putman (@femscriptintros)

February 10, 2016

JANE pours her gorgeous figure into a tight dress, slips into her stiletto-heeled fuck-me shoes, and checks herself in the dresser mirror.

— Ross Putman (@femscriptintros)

February 10, 2016

JANE, a 19 year old Bunny girl - honey-blonde farmland beauty queen.

— Ross Putman (@femscriptintros)

February 10, 2016

 

 

 

[Plain Old Tele]

I saw some of these last night. Just awful. And depressing. 

 

Although, I suppose for writers looking to break in, now you know some of your competition.

[WrathOfHan]

JANE pours her gorgeous figure into a tight dress, slips into her stiletto-heeled fuck-me shoes, and checks herself in the dresser mirror.

 

 

[TalismanRing]

4 minutes ago, WrathOfHan said:

JANE pours her gorgeous figure into a tight dress, slips into her stiletto-heeled fuck-me shoes, and checks herself in the dresser mirror.

 

 

 

If they film this they better be playing Amy Winehouse's Fuck Me Pumps unironically in the background.

[grim22]

My favorite

 

JANE (late 20s) sits hunched over a microscope. She’s attractive, but too much of a professional to care about her appearance.

 

Obviously written by these guys

 

 

 

 

 

[cookie]

19 minutes ago, grim22 said:

JANE (late 20s) sits hunched over a microscope. She’s attractive, but too much of a professional to care about her appearance.

 

Do she also happen to be a nuclear physicist?

[BadAtGender]

45 minutes ago, Telemachos said:

I saw some of these last night. Just awful. And depressing. 

 

Although, I suppose for writers looking to break in, now you know some of your competition.

 

Confidence booster!

[grim22]

40 minutes ago, cookie said:

 

Do she also happen to be a nuclear physicist?

 

[Avatree]

It sucks. I've noticed it several times in the few scripts that I have read, it's freaking ridiculous. As if the writer is 12 years old.

[AniNate]

I saw some of these last night. Just awful. And depressing. 

 

Although, I suppose for writers looking to break in, now you know some of your competition. [emoji38]

Should that make you feel better or worse?

[Blankments]

My "fave" is this one

 

Ross Putman ‏@femscriptintros  24h24 hours ago

His wife JANE is making dinner and watching CNN on a small TV. She was model pretty once, but living an actual life has taken its toll.

 

It's super ridiculous though that it's even like this

[AniNate]

Of course, apart from the blatant sexism and objectification of the characters, it's plain poor writing. It's telling instead of showing. We should figure out these women are "beautiful" or "adorable" through describing their physical features and actions, not because the writer says they are.

Edited February 11, 2016 by tribefan695

[Jake Gittes]

I was model pretty once, but actual life has taken its toll

[Jessie]

5 hours ago, tribefan695 said:

Of course, apart from the blatant sexism and objectification of the characters, it's plain poor writing. It's telling instead of showing. We should figure out these women are "beautiful" or "adorable" through describing their physical features and actions, not because the writer says they are.

 

Seriously you are clutching at straws now, I was expending to read far worse than this. Its just a typical guy writing these scripts, its hardly 'depressing' or 'disgusting' like you people are making out. You guys are reading way too much into this.

 

Basically to stop this you really want more women writers out there.

[The Stingray]

I don't find this particularly shocking. +100 000 scripts are written each year, 99% of which will never result in an actual movie and 99% of the writers will never become professional writers, so it is not surprising to find this type of language in at least some of them. You'll probably find similar type of ridiculous descriptions for other groups as well, like Asians, Arabs or blacks.
 

[TalismanRing]

Putman says he's doing this not because it's amusing but because it's systemic, that it's what he's seen time and time again in the over 4,000 - 5,000 scripts he's read.

 

http://mashable.com/2016/02/10/female-script-introductions-twitter/#7IDK6aIxZqqh
 

Quote

"Women are first and foremost described as "beautiful," "attractive," or—my personal blow-my-brains-out-favorite, "stunning." They're always "stunning" in a certain dress or "stunning" despite being covered in dirt because they're a paleontologist—or whatever," he wrote in an email to Mashable. After reading many scripts (and maybe complaining a little on Facebook) he decided to keep track of them via Twitter.

 

"I plan on posting every one that I read, and there are plenty that aren't offensive, but honestly, most of them have some element—subtle or overt—that plays into latent objectification," he wrote.

 

Putman also clarified that using the name "Jane" in the tweets wasn't only to protect the writer's anonymity. "I didn't want anyone to be able to pinpoint a specific script or screenwriter largely because the point here is that it's a systemic problem, not an individual one; my goal isn't to shame individual screenwriters about existing work," he wrote, adding "Changing the names to JANE for me...demonstrates how female characters are often thought about in the same, simplistic and often degrading way. Giving them all the same name, I hope, emphasizes that."

 

Putman hopes that these tweets encourage all writers in the industry — both male and female — to think differently about how they're approaching their female characters from the very beginning of their scripts. He wrote, "it's something that absolutely needs to be talked about."

 

 

[AniNate]

5 hours ago, tribefan695 said:

Of course, apart from the blatant sexism and objectification of the characters, it's plain poor writing. It's telling instead of showing. We should figure out these women are "beautiful" or "adorable" through describing their physical features and actions, not because the writer says they are.

 

Seriously you are clutching at straws now, I was expending to read far worse than this. Its just a typical guy writing these

Uh, yeah. That's the problem

[Jandrew]

Devils advocate: some of those could easily be written by women. Women talk like that too. For instance, how do we know Jane is not Rebel Wilson's character in How to be Single? Or Rebel Wilson's character in anything? How do we know Ross Putman isn't Rebel Wilson?

[chasmmi]

Well now I know why Megan Fox and Jessica Alba get so many roles  

 

 

Out of interest, are there many examples of how lead actors are introduced to scripts in their opening 2-3 lines?

 

My assumption would be action film scripts maybe talk about rugged good looks, but dramas possibly delve into personality more (Or is this just actually an issue with bad scriptwriting regardless of gender?).

 

At least I now have a formula for the opening scene of my new screenplay, How about:

 

Her double D tits spilling out of her mega low cut sexy black minidress, Jane is sobbing profusely as she stares at the Baywatch actress-like figure of her dead sister lying voluptuously, neigh suggestively in the coffin beneath her...

 

I smell a $150M opening week...

 

 

 

[Plain Old Tele]

Homework assignment #1: dig up some scripts written by women and see how they write their character descriptions. 

 

(They're far less interested in describing the physical hotness of the characters.)

 

It's also worth seeing what pro screenwriters are tweeting about this. Most are a bit rueful that they've been lousy at this at some point or another, and there's some good discussion about what these character descriptions are actually used for.