cookie Posted April 1, 2018 Share Posted April 1, 2018 (edited) 4 minutes ago, Isle of Pasta said: ....but what did you really think?! I’ve got time to change it!! I never actually read it Might do so later today tho Edited April 1, 2018 by cookie Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ezen Baklattan Posted April 1, 2018 Share Posted April 1, 2018 5 minutes ago, cookie said: Reveal hidden contents I never actually read it Might do so later today tho LMAO I do actually want to tweak a few things with it, though. I’ll try to make some edits within the hour so it should be smoother to read. will admit I’m still not 100% satisfied with Jakey G’s characterization. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ethan Hunt Posted April 1, 2018 Share Posted April 1, 2018 1 hour ago, Isle of Pasta said: .....not sure if serious. But at the same time.....it may need a lot of work. As a huge fan of the first one: Well start by saying the movie has a couple hella incredible setpices and Sasha is still great in the lead. Jake G is a simply passable villain but that's fine My big complaint: The most interesting thing going on in the movie is the human/alien relation stuff. Which was really powerful in the Chicago scenes which are easily the strongest sequence in the movie. But after that it doesn't ever really revisit the idea which feels both awkward and disappointing 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ezen Baklattan Posted April 1, 2018 Share Posted April 1, 2018 17 minutes ago, Ethan Hunt said: As a huge fan of the first one: Well start by saying the movie has a couple hella incredible setpices and Sasha is still great in the lead. Jake G is a simply passable villain but that's fine My big complaint: Hide contents The most interesting thing going on in the movie is the human/alien relation stuff. Which was really powerful in the Chicago scenes which are easily the strongest sequence in the movie. But after that it doesn't ever really revisit the idea which feels both awkward and disappointing That's a good point. I'll try to work that thread in with the rest of the movie. I've been struggling with finding a place to do so organically, though. Spoiler The climax, especially where a bunch of civilians go to help Alex defeat Venchell, can deliver a bit of a theme where "we're different but stronger together." That could be a good way to implement it, methinks. What grade would you give it? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ethan Hunt Posted April 1, 2018 Share Posted April 1, 2018 3 minutes ago, Isle of Pasta said: That's a good point. I'll try to work that thread in with the rest of the movie. What grade would you give it? I'd say probably a B+/A-. Still an exciting blockbuster with interesting ideas that don't always feel fully fleshed out. Looking forward to giving it another go if you make edits 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ezen Baklattan Posted April 1, 2018 Share Posted April 1, 2018 Just now, Ethan Hunt said: I'd say probably a B+/A-. Still an exciting blockbuster with interesting ideas that don't always feel fully fleshed out. Looking forward to giving it another go if you make edits Will say, though. Interspecies racism is going to be a bigger theme in the third film. The big thing I wanted to do here was give closure to the story of Alex's true family. 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
cookie Posted April 1, 2018 Share Posted April 1, 2018 (edited) I've only gotten to the Chicago bit so far but the inter-species racism stuff seems kinda forced tbh Edited April 1, 2018 by cookie 2 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
cookie Posted April 1, 2018 Share Posted April 1, 2018 (edited) Ok that twist with Everett I didn't see coming. Well played. Edited April 1, 2018 by cookie 2 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
cookie Posted April 1, 2018 Share Posted April 1, 2018 What Fucking what 1 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ezen Baklattan Posted April 1, 2018 Share Posted April 1, 2018 5 minutes ago, cookie said: What Fucking what Is it bad that I think you could be talking about one of like 3 different things. The climax as a whole was a PAIN to write. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ethan Hunt Posted April 1, 2018 Share Posted April 1, 2018 I remember thinking the third act setpiece wasn't as strong as the other two but thought the other two were pretty brilliant Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ezen Baklattan Posted April 1, 2018 Share Posted April 1, 2018 Just now, Ethan Hunt said: I remember thinking the third act setpiece wasn't as strong as the other two but thought the other two were pretty brilliant The first act setpiece in Lachino was definitely my favorite. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
cookie Posted April 1, 2018 Share Posted April 1, 2018 12 minutes ago, Isle of Pasta said: Is it bad that I think you could be talking about one of like 3 different things. The climax as a whole was a PAIN to write. AlexBot Why Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ezen Baklattan Posted April 1, 2018 Share Posted April 1, 2018 Just now, cookie said: AlexBot Why Okay that can DEFINITELY be changed. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
cookie Posted April 1, 2018 Share Posted April 1, 2018 (edited) I joked about Gyllenhaal being the worst thing in the movie in my troll review but he really is the black hole that sinks this movie. What was his motivation even? Edited April 1, 2018 by cookie 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ezen Baklattan Posted April 1, 2018 Share Posted April 1, 2018 5 minutes ago, cookie said: I joked about Gyllenhaal being the worst thing in the movie in my troll review but he really is the black hole that sinks this movie. What was his motivation even? I had written his a character yearning for power without any real inward exploration as to why. But reading it again....it needs something really, REALLY different. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
cookie Posted April 1, 2018 Share Posted April 1, 2018 (edited) 48 minutes ago, Isle of Pasta said: I had written his a character yearning for power without any real inward exploration as to why. But reading it again....it needs somethings by really, REALLY different. But the way his plan matches up with that makes little to no sense. Half the stuff he does in the movie doesn't add up to anything. Go ahead and do a serious rewrite because as it is a mess. A LOW B- because I still like the main characters and the visuals. Edited April 1, 2018 by cookie 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ezen Baklattan Posted April 1, 2018 Share Posted April 1, 2018 Yeah, this is gonna be another film that requires a big rewrite. I’ve been struggling a LOT with how to work his character. Any specific points that need to be worked on? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ethan Hunt Posted April 1, 2018 Share Posted April 1, 2018 I think he has a really cool intro but then his character is just kind of a flatline of nothingness after that. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ezen Baklattan Posted April 1, 2018 Share Posted April 1, 2018 @cookie mind if I PM you some ideas for an alternate brainstorming? Obviously not right away, but I will try and work on it this afternoon. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
