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Crunching the Numbers: (Year) Two For the Show

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That just leaves Truth is and Voltron Dos.

 

Help.

I know it probably won't work this time, but...

 

 

LOOK INTO HIS PUPPY DOG EYES NUMBERS

 

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YOU DON'T WANT TO MAKE LOTOR HIDDLESTON SAD

 

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TRUTH IS

 

The guy looks up with a smile and says his name is Kyler.

 

WHO NAMES THEIR KID KYLER? WHY DO WE HAVE A TYLER AND A KYLER?

 

Tyler rests against the wall panting exhausted after orgasming twice in a row. ... Tyler exhausted and drunk says he can’t. He says he can’t orgasm twice in one night.

 

IS TYLER UNAWARE OF HIS OWN BIOLOGY? DID THE FILM CHANGE WRITERS MID-SCENE AND THEY DIDN"T READ WHAT EACH OTHER WROTE?

 

He says he can’t protect Tyler from Nicole. Tyler asks what they should do. He says Nicole already knows about the cabin and knows where they live. He says they can’t escape her.

 

THIS IS WHY YOU CALL THE POLICE. 

 

 

The film is better than Poison and Wine, by virtue of having actual character development and an actual idea of a story and themes. Though these films seem to be loosely following the same general arc of the Fifty Shades films, which maybe isn't the best story series to use as inspiration for your plot? Also, there are multiple instances of "what?" "why?" The does belabor the point a little by having Tyler and Hunter reconnect at a slow pace, with a number of scenes that feel like padding. Also Kyler and Adam both simply vanish from the film, and Adam lives in the same place as Tyler!

 

But based on this improvement from Film 1 to 2, maybe the conclusion will get to positive?

 

4/10

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TRUTH IS

 

The guy looks up with a smile and says his name is Kyler.

 

WHO NAMES THEIR KID KYLER? WHY DO WE HAVE A TYLER AND A KYLER?

 

Tyler rests against the wall panting exhausted after orgasming twice in a row. ... Tyler exhausted and drunk says he can’t. He says he can’t orgasm twice in one night.

 

IS TYLER UNAWARE OF HIS OWN BIOLOGY? DID THE FILM CHANGE WRITERS MID-SCENE AND THEY DIDN"T READ WHAT EACH OTHER WROTE?

 

He says he can’t protect Tyler from Nicole. Tyler asks what they should do. He says Nicole already knows about the cabin and knows where they live. He says they can’t escape her.

 

THIS IS WHY YOU CALL THE POLICE. 

 

 

The film is better than Poison and Wine, by virtue of having actual character development and an actual idea of a story and themes. Though these films seem to be loosely following the same general arc of the Fifty Shades films, which maybe isn't the best story series to use as inspiration for your plot? Also, there are multiple instances of "what?" "why?" The does belabor the point a little by having Tyler and Hunter reconnect at a slow pace, with a number of scenes that feel like padding. Also Kyler and Adam both simply vanish from the film, and Adam lives in the same place as Tyler!

 

But based on this improvement from Film 1 to 2, maybe the conclusion will get to positive?

 

4/10

 

 

 

Two orgasms was a typo and I deserve to get laughed at haha. I wrote it while tipsy so it was my own undoing.

 

I expanded why Adam disappears. He travels with his job and has a girl (stays at her place). Kyler disappears because (well actually pops up midway again) but he leaves because Tyler is seeing Hunter. 

 

Actually wrote these well before Fifty Shades...I made a post about the history of me writing these stories in the Discussion thread. 

 

"Call the police" yeah...this is an actual plot hole and I kind of needed it there. 

 

Also on the topic of history of writing this. Kyler is based off a guy I actually went on a date with (or few more than just one). Basically all the events that happened between Kyler and Tyler actually happened. So that is why I went with the name Kyler. Just realized after I posted it, it was close to Tyler...oops. -_-

 

Much of Truth Is is actually based off real dates and experiences loosely connected. Scenes with Kyler, the the lunch date with Hunter and Tyler, the zoo date, the dance during dinner, and the hill scene all happened. I draw inspiration of my life and have put it into these films. 

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VOLTRON: RISE OF LOTOR

 

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It's not time to go subplotty
Just relax, take it easy
You were a breakout, that's your fault
There's so much you want audiences to know
Find a brother, befriend a native
If you want you can die nobly
Look at Lotor, he is young, and not happy

 

Zarkon was once like he is now, and he knows it makes him queasy
To lose his calm when he's found they're quite similar
Don't take your time, and overplot
Don't need to force out everything you got
For your audience will be here tomorrow
But your sense of novelty may not

 

So please listen and let me explain
So you don't go down this road again
Don't fall into a trap of spewing out all your story
The best thing you can learn, is to show and not just tell
So take this to heart and write things a simpler way
You know, you have to show

 

7.3/10

 

 

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VOLTRON: RISE OF LOTOR

 

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It's not time to go subplotty
Just relax, take it easy
You were a breakout, that's your fault
There's so much you want audiences to know
Find a brother, befriend a native
If you want you can die nobly
Look at Lotor, he is young, and not happy

 

Zarkon was once like he is now, and he knows it makes him queasy
To lose his calm when he's found they're quite similar
Don't take your time, and overplot
Don't need to force out everything you got
For your audience will be here tomorrow
But your sense of novelty may not

 

So please listen and let me explain
So you don't go down this road again
Don't fall into a trap of spewing out all your story
The best thing you can learn, is to show and not just tell
So take this to heart and write things a simpler way
You know, you have to show

 

7.3/10

 

 

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VOLTRON: RISE OF LOTOR

 

  Hide contents

 

It's not time to go subplotty
Just relax, take it easy
You were a breakout, that's your fault
There's so much you want audiences to know
Find a brother, befriend a native
If you want you can die nobly
Look at Lotor, he is young, and not happy

 

Zarkon was once like he is now, and he knows it makes him queasy
To lose his calm when he's found they're quite similar
Don't take your time, and overplot
Don't need to force out everything you got
For your audience will be here tomorrow
But your sense of novelty may not

 

So please listen and let me explain
So you don't go down this road again
Don't fall into a trap of spewing out all your story
The best thing you can learn, is to show and not just tell
So take this to heart and write things a simpler way
You know, you have to show

 

7.3/10

 

 

Well it's a positive, I'll take it.

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Well it's a positive, I'll take it.

 

The film felt a bit too crowded with Pidge's subplot taking up a giant chunk of the film for example.

 

Also, I sense a tradition of the black paladin dying in every film.

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